Poor Imp

And yes, hello Jig...this is somewhat of a critique. ^_^ You've set things up well, leading in with the verse. And the first line picks up interest with 'home/prison' contrasted. ...

I'm trying to be less than impish and a bit more responsible as a usergroup leader...and respond to the entries, naturally. ^_^'' And as I'm not yet randomly dead, well ...

Edited to an R rating . Yes, it ought to be R-rated, for further reference, if it involves anything so sexually graphic, Unrec. As to the story itself, aside from ...

You may to check for the homonyms - pale , of course, means white or wan skin, but pail is more along the lines of a bucket. ^_^ Aside from ...

Ah well, I'm back. ^_^ You have an aptly epic style, so to speak - battles, heroes, cultures clashing on the field of contest. Tolkien manages something similar, if more ...

Ah! No spaces, my friend - it's like looking at a cinderblock wall. ^_^'' Put spaces between your paragraphs, manually, by editing the post. I assume you probably copy/pasted into ...

Altogether, that was a read worth the time. ^_~ You've got a good tone and atmosphere - and not only that, but conflict woven in. Too often one can get ...

I don't want to reiterate Jack, because that would be a dull comment here doubtless. ^_^ But I've got nearly the same impression. Nothing out of place; I loved the ...

I'm not sure precisely where you're going here, Book_worm; and all in all, it's not easy to decipher with the lack of spacing between paragraphs and dialogue. It helps a ...

I won't say it was 'fun' or I'll risk the insulting implication of a dimunative. It is an entertaining read, and not simply entertaining--you've at least presented and hinted at ...

as i sead before i know its bad but so is complaining about what another person dose if it dosent affect you , if you dont like it dont read ...

Now I've read a few things of yours, Eccentric, and, of course, always 'tis a pleasure. You've an even understanding and familiarity with the forms that I think keeps things ...

It's a well-described brief interlude there. But emotionally forward without angst? That's always the trick, isn't it. ^_^ Try describing things more thoroughly--without a recurring reference to "I".

What's rather neat about it all is the catch-phrase like simplicity the lines manage. ^_^ I can see them intermingled with film in some movie trailer. Sighing, Weeping, Longing, A ...

Hey Reas. ^_^ It seems more than years since I last got to critique something of yours--now the review week is an excuse to. Firstly, alternate history is always fun. ...